Hey guys!
Here's my speech draft. It would be wonderful if you could edit, proofread, and tell me what I should take out- it's already 5 min 30 seconds!! If you have any ideas of what I should end my speech with, that would be greatly appreciated (my ending isn't too good). Thanks!
Put your speech on a Google doc and click "File" and then "Share". Under the "Who has access" heading, change the setting from "Private" to "Anyone who has the link". Then copy & paste the new link they give you here!
ReplyDeleteThanks Hanna!
DeleteThis is a very good speech Ruvini! There's not really much I can say, I really enjoyed reading it. It had very good development and good examples. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Jessica!
DeleteGreat job! I really enjoyed reading your speech. It made me look at child pageants in a new way and now I know all the negative effects it can have.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Chelsey!
DeleteI think that the topic you have chosen to do your speech on is really relatable to our age group. I, personally, watch TLC for fun sometimes, but I'll admit that I have never actually thought about the problems that might effect young contestants in shows like Toddlers and Tiaras. Your speech was eye opening, and well put together; however, it IS a bit long! I also think that you should avoid using phrases like "in summary", too, since it kind of takes away from the flow of the speech (never evers). Otherwise, good job Ruvini!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback Hanna! I have shortened it to 4 min 30 sec, and I took out the "In summary".
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