Hi Winki! I read over your speech and I thought it was really good! I was originally going to do homosexuality as my speech topic, but even though I changed it, I still think its a great topic and that people should be informed about it. However, there are a few things that need to be fixed. Your speech is a little short, so if you can add a bit more detail or elaborate, that would make your speech much better. There are a few grammatical errors (i.e. I will be discussing homosexuality...you do not need to put about when you are using the word discussing). Also, a fairly large amount of people who are homosexual cant help it...it's not their choice. Many of them are simply born homosexual, which is caused by a chemical imbalance in the brain. You could include this in your speech as well. Many people believe that homosexual people choose to be gay, not that they are born that way, and that's why so many people hate them, because they believe that homosexuals are choosing to be in the non-traditional heterosexual relationship. Just some things to think about. hope this helps! :)
Hi Winki! I read over your speech and I thought it was really good! I was originally going to do homosexuality as my speech topic, but even though I changed it, I still think its a great topic and
ReplyDeletethat people should be informed about it. However, there are a few things that need to be fixed. Your speech is a little short, so if you can add a bit more detail or elaborate, that would make your speech much better. There are a few grammatical errors (i.e. I will be discussing homosexuality...you do not need to put about when you are using the word discussing). Also, a fairly large amount of people who are homosexual cant help it...it's not their choice. Many of them are simply born homosexual, which is caused by a chemical imbalance in the brain. You could include this in your speech as well. Many people believe that homosexual people choose to be gay, not that they are born that way, and that's why so many people hate them, because they believe that homosexuals are choosing to be in the non-traditional heterosexual relationship. Just some things to think about. hope this helps! :)
Thanks! I'm going to re-edit this over the weekend CX
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